My birthday為題目的作文

My birthdayYesterday was my birthday. I invited my good friends to my home. they buyed me many nice re the party. I open all the presents one by give me some are all liked by me. Of them, I like the book best. Because it is written in English,I can pratice my r seeing the presents ,We have an interesting party, We danced and played some games .I feel we all enjoy ourselves and this is the best party that I hold.

1.“they buyed me many nice re the party. I open …”此句中句首字母要大寫，“buyed”應改為“bought”，“open”應改為“opened”.注意時態及詞形變化規則。

2.“They give me some surprise.”因敍述過去的事，應為一般過去時，故“give”應改為“gave”。

3.單詞“pratice”應改為“practice” 。

4.“We have an interesting party, We danced and played some games .I feel we all enjoy ourselves and this is the best party that I hold.”應該使用一般過去時，所以“have”應改為“had”,“feel”應改為“felt”,“enjoy ”應改為“enjoyed”“is ”應改為“was”,“that I hold”定語從句時態為過去完成時較好，故”“old”應改為“had held”。

本文語句連貫，句意通順。內容具體。但存在單詞，標點和語法錯誤。

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