盈餘四級作文點評

Part Ⅰ Writing (30 minutes)

注意：此部分試題在答題卡1上。

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Students Selecting Their Lecturers. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below:

1.有些大學允許學生自由選擇某些課程的任課教師

2.學生選擇教師時所考慮的主要因素

3.學生自選任課教師的益處和可能產生的問題

Students Selecting Their Lecturers

大學英語四級考試2006年6月真題精讀筆記

一、審題謀篇

就體裁來説，本次四級作文為議論文，話題是關於學生自由選擇某些課程的任課教師，屬於校園類話題。

根據提示信息可以判斷本文為提綱式作文，據此可以把文章分為三段。首段介紹文章的主題“Some universities give students freedom to choose their own lecturers for some courses”。第二段進行事實説明，分析學生選擇老師可能考慮的因素：教學風格(teaching style)、學術水平（academics）、個性（personality）、作業要求（assignments）等。由於篇幅有限，考生不能一一列舉。應從中選取比較有代表性的、易於表達的`，使用firstly，secondly…等詞進行邏輯組織。第三段是結論段，從事情的兩面性指出其positive and negative effects。

寫作時，要選擇適當的角度，最好使用第三人稱進行論述，這樣會讓文章讀起來更加客觀，觀點更容易被接受。

二、參考範文

Students Selecting Their Lecturers

An increasing number of universities are undertaking some changes by giving their students freedom to choose their own lecturers for some courses. This practice, ever since it comes out, has been very popular with students.

There are several factors influencing students’ choice of the lecturers. Firstly, an ideal lecturer should have an interesting and humorous teaching style, so that students can learn their subjects in a relaxed and pleasant atmosphere. Secondly, a diverse academic background is also preferred since a knowledgeable teacher can greatly enlarge students’ scope of knowledge. Last but not least, a teacher with an agreeable personality is also desirable to students.

This practice undoubtedly has lots of positive effects on the present college education, as it can encourage students to take an active part in study and urges teachers to improve their teaching quality. However, it can inevitably bring some negative effects. For instance, some teachers may try to cater to the students’ interest to increase the popularity of their lessons, while ignoring the teaching plan, which may lead to the opposite direction of high education quality.

越來越多的大學允許學生自由選擇某些課程的任課教師。這一舉措，自施行之日起，就深受同學們的歡迎。

有幾個因素會影響到學生對老師的選擇。首先，理想的教師應該具有風趣幽默的教學風格，為學生創造一種輕鬆舒適的學習環境。其次，教師知識多樣化也會得到學生的喜愛，因為一個學識淵博的教師會極大地影響學生的知識範圍。最後但同樣重要的是教師平易近人的個性，這在學生選擇教師時也是頗具吸引力的。

該舉措的實施無疑對當前的大學教育產生了很多積極的影響。一方面，它鼓勵學生對學習採取更加積極的態度；另一方面，也會促使教師更好地改進自己的教學。然而，它不可避免地也會有諸多負面影響。例如，教師有可能只顧迎合學生的要求而忽視教學計劃，從而背離高質量大學教育的目標。

三、範文點評

對題材的成功挖掘是寫出好文章的前提。文章第二段具體選擇了三種比較全面並具有代表性的原因。這樣一來，段落層次分明又符合邏輯，是很成功的構思。文章最後一段正反兩方面的論述也頗有深度。語言表述簡練，沒有語言錯誤。形容詞、動詞的選擇多樣化，富有變化。

【生動的用詞】

undertake 實行；ideal 理想的；diverse 多樣的；prefer 喜歡；agreeable 平易近人的；desirable 渴望得到的；undoubtedly 毫無疑問；inevitably 毋庸置疑

【豐富的短語】

cater to 滿足；lead to 導致；be popular with 受歡迎；have effects on 對……有影響

【多變的句式】

本文行文過程中嘗試着變換不同的句式，讓文章讀起來不那麼枯燥。多種時態交叉使用，使作者思想清晰明瞭。如：“Firstly, an ideal lecturer should have an interesting and humorous teaching style, so that students can learn their subjects in a relaxed and pleasant atmosphere. Secondly, a diverse academic background is also preferred since a knowledgeable teacher can greatly enlarge students’ scope of knowledge.”邏輯性強，語言功底深，為文章增添了亮點。

藉助邏輯關聯詞，如since，as，however等，以及順序關聯詞，如firstly，secondly，last but not least等，可使論述連貫，思路清晰易懂。文中最後一句是非限定性定語從句 “which may lead to the opposite direction of high education quality”，它的使用突出了作者鮮明的態度，且言簡意賅，緊扣提綱。